on trying to write soft NC-17 fic

[timepiececlock]

I need a romantic word for "penis", dammit. I can't find one.

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Re: you are going to the special hell for that pun!

[rashaka.livejournal.com]

I haven't written sentences where I need a cut-and-replace word, if that's what you're asking. It's just right now the language is more abstract and poetical, and last night I was thinking I wanted to make the descriptions more literal/concrete, but trying to think of sentences and being unhappy drove me to post.

Re: you are going to the special hell for that pun!

[trinityofone.livejournal.com]

Ah, gotcha. Well, I can offer to beta the scene for you if you want (wow! the one time I'll be able to use the "has written a lotta smut" line on my resume!). Otherwise, I'd suggest avoiding more concrete description if it makes you uncomfortable. That's not necessarily too hard. There are even instances where you can get away with "him" for penis and it's perfectly clear that you're not, y'know, talking about the whole dude: "She took him into her hand." That sort of thing.

And hey, I finally thought of another penis-word that I don't hate: shaft. It's not very versatile, though. You don't want to be, like, "She looked down at his shaft." *snicker*

Ooh! Or, you could play up the hardness angle. And...that's probably more advice than you really wanted from me.

Re: you are going to the special hell for that pun!

[rashaka.livejournal.com]

There are even instances where you can get away with "him" for penis and it's perfectly clear that you're not, y'know, talking about the whole dude: "She took him into her hand." That sort of thing.

I've noticed that before as a potential alternative that doesn't always fall into silly or crude.

You don't want to be, like, "She looked down at his shaft."

Thanks to you I'm going to be thinking about that line and cracking up ALL DAY. It'll randomly come out in conversations: "So I went to Albertsons and she looked down at his shaft."

Re: you are going to the special hell for that pun!

[trinityofone.livejournal.com]

Looking at this again now, I can't believe I didn't use my shaft icon when I made that comment. I was remiss. I fail at life.