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Apr. 28th, 2004 12:13 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
timepiececlockWell, it's midnight and I have to go to sleep. I worked hard though-- I wrote about 85% of chapter 3, and the first paragraph of the sex scene in chapter 4. I'm kind of on a roll. I keep trying to think of ways to make it even meaner, though. So far the earlier bits are evil but the sex is still kinda tame.
Here's a snippet:
Fucking was like fighting, and that never changed no matter how many people battled their way into bed in the passing of years. For born fighters like ninjas, fucking wasn’t just a skirmish, it was a war. It was an attack when Kakashi’s hands ripped at the younger man’s shirt as he shoved him backward toward the bed, and it was a counter-strike when Kabuto one-upped him by yanking the mask off his face and pressing his mouth against his. They collided together as they fell onto the guestroom mattress, hand pulling at clothing and tongues buried in each other’s mouths. Kakashi didn’t think about the boy trussed up in the closet who could wake or choke at any time, and Kabuto didn’t think about the hunter nin that might or might not be making their way to the waystation.
This is from the beginning of the sex scene. This is my first time writing slash, and I admit its new territory for me. Heck, any sex scenes are still pretty new to me, as I've only written one other one for the Spike/Buffy fic Turnabout. Remember my happy little fic about Buffy having sex with a mentally incompetent Spike and basically raping him kindly in the school basement? Yep. And that one wasn't even that graphic when it came to the smut. I've read much more.
I'm hoping this will be good. I think my descriptions and sentence structure is a little heavy-handed, but I'll do serious revising once I have all four chapters written out fully. Provided I don't go mentally incompetent myself before then.
So, this is it. I'm finally writing mature-rated yaoi / slash, and it's darkfic to boot. I honestly never thought I'd see the day.
Here's a snippet:
Fucking was like fighting, and that never changed no matter how many people battled their way into bed in the passing of years. For born fighters like ninjas, fucking wasn’t just a skirmish, it was a war. It was an attack when Kakashi’s hands ripped at the younger man’s shirt as he shoved him backward toward the bed, and it was a counter-strike when Kabuto one-upped him by yanking the mask off his face and pressing his mouth against his. They collided together as they fell onto the guestroom mattress, hand pulling at clothing and tongues buried in each other’s mouths. Kakashi didn’t think about the boy trussed up in the closet who could wake or choke at any time, and Kabuto didn’t think about the hunter nin that might or might not be making their way to the waystation.
This is from the beginning of the sex scene. This is my first time writing slash, and I admit its new territory for me. Heck, any sex scenes are still pretty new to me, as I've only written one other one for the Spike/Buffy fic Turnabout. Remember my happy little fic about Buffy having sex with a mentally incompetent Spike and basically raping him kindly in the school basement? Yep. And that one wasn't even that graphic when it came to the smut. I've read much more.
I'm hoping this will be good. I think my descriptions and sentence structure is a little heavy-handed, but I'll do serious revising once I have all four chapters written out fully. Provided I don't go mentally incompetent myself before then.
So, this is it. I'm finally writing mature-rated yaoi / slash, and it's darkfic to boot. I honestly never thought I'd see the day.
