Actually, I don't have anythign published. This was written for a writing class at school.
If I have one criticism, and this is more a personal hatred than a flaw per se, its that the first five paragraphs all begin with "Th" words ("The"s and "There"s). I know thats incredibly anal, but I spend a lot of time editing and that sort of repition grates at me a bit..
I'll think about that, and look over that part of the story later. Thanks for pointing that out. One one my pet peeves is repetition of the same action/description word twice in two sentences, so I get where your pet peeve is coming from.
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Re: In the humble opinion of one who has had work published...
Date: 2002-12-12 12:02 pm (UTC)Actually, I don't have anythign published. This was written for a writing class at school.
If I have one criticism, and this is more a personal hatred than a flaw per se, its that the first five paragraphs all begin with "Th" words ("The"s and "There"s). I know thats incredibly anal, but I spend a lot of time editing and that sort of repition grates at me a bit..
I'll think about that, and look over that part of the story later. Thanks for pointing that out. One one my pet peeves is repetition of the same action/description word twice in two sentences, so I get where your pet peeve is coming from.
Thanks for responding!