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Well, it's midnight and I have to go to sleep. I worked hard though-- I wrote about 85% of chapter 3, and the first paragraph of the sex scene in chapter 4. I'm kind of on a roll. I keep trying to think of ways to make it even meaner, though. So far the earlier bits are evil but the sex is still kinda tame.

Here's a snippet:

Fucking was like fighting, and that never changed no matter how many people battled their way into bed in the passing of years. For born fighters like ninjas, fucking wasn’t just a skirmish, it was a war. It was an attack when Kakashi’s hands ripped at the younger man’s shirt as he shoved him backward toward the bed, and it was a counter-strike when Kabuto one-upped him by yanking the mask off his face and pressing his mouth against his. They collided together as they fell onto the guestroom mattress, hand pulling at clothing and tongues buried in each other’s mouths. Kakashi didn’t think about the boy trussed up in the closet who could wake or choke at any time, and Kabuto didn’t think about the hunter nin that might or might not be making their way to the waystation.

This is from the beginning of the sex scene. This is my first time writing slash, and I admit its new territory for me. Heck, any sex scenes are still pretty new to me, as I've only written one other one for the Spike/Buffy fic Turnabout. Remember my happy little fic about Buffy having sex with a mentally incompetent Spike and basically raping him kindly in the school basement? Yep. And that one wasn't even that graphic when it came to the smut. I've read much more.

I'm hoping this will be good. I think my descriptions and sentence structure is a little heavy-handed, but I'll do serious revising once I have all four chapters written out fully. Provided I don't go mentally incompetent myself before then.

So, this is it. I'm finally writing mature-rated yaoi / slash, and it's darkfic to boot. I honestly never thought I'd see the day.

Comments

Re: continued

[bronwenstx.livejournal.com]

I know what you mean about Kakashi. Hahaha. And that line does beg for something.

I don't want to go to all the exposition work of coming up with a reason for Kabuto to come in contact with Kakashi, flirt with him, and then get away again-- methinks that neither would be able to sit through another face-off where all they do is talk... which means writing another battle which would be hard and complicated and require set-up.

Actually, you could get away with that, everytime he runs off, this adds the frustration on Kakashi's behalf (and of course the tension). In any case, if Kabuto does this with a constant momento, Kakashi is pretty much tied up in his hands. Uh...like a step forward, step back sort of encounters. Well, I think a more appropriate term for Kakashi and Kabuto is dancing. They do tend to dance around each other, obviously Kabuto more than Kakashi. Kakashi seems eager for a close one.

He thinks he's got him, but it's actually the other way around. Every encounter, you get a step closer to an actual battle but it never happens. For Kakashi's case, it's always a step backwards for him because Kabuto loves screwing around with adults. You are right of course and that neither won't be able to delay that fated battle. But in my opinion, the way its going in the anime, it seems inevitable that their battle will be delayed in one way or another. Perhaps an excusable constant interference?

Heh. I hope I'm helping at least.